First Draft- Comments

Our first draft of our thriller trailer was shown to the rest of our class who gave us feedback on what they believe we could improve. We hadn't finished it completely at the time but this is the feedback we received:

What Went Well:

- The non diegetic soundtrack worked well with the genre and told the audience what to expect from the film
- The intertitles narrated the trailer well and helped to set the pace of the trailer. They also liked the style and design of the titles and thought they matched the genre
- The pace of the trailer was good and matched the genre, it made suspense and made it obvious it was a thriller 

Improvements:

- It looked a bit too much like a film opening

- More diegetic sound to help narrate it a bit more and mix it up from the intertitles 
- Make the main character Owen look  more controlling and aggressive, maybe by adding some more footage

We have since gone back and added some diegetic speech to the trailer, but have kept it to a minimum and we think the intertitles are important in setting the pace and narrating the story as well as keeping it tense.